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i am this nice beautiful big bull and i really don't like to go to the bullfights i got there and this little man started waving at me i went at him very fast the little man had alot of speed like the little bunnys he got out of my way really fasy his pretty red flag was reall nice but little i really liked it i went really fast afer it but the little man hopped out of my big way i was very sad.
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I'm a gorgeous humongous bull. I dislike going to these, bullfights. When I arrived there this petite man started waving at me. I gained pace, and went exceptionally quick. When I got close enough the stubby man hopped instantly out of the way. I caught sight of his alluring red flag. It was superb and I adored it. I sped after it but the miniature man bounced out of the way. I was somewhat depressed by this.
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I'm a gorgeous humongous bull. I dislike going to these, bullfights. When I arrived there this petite man started waving at me. I gained pace, and went exceptionally quick. When I got close enough the stubby man hopped instantly out of the way. I caught sight of his alluring red flag. It was superb and I adored it. I sped after it but the miniature man bounced out of the way. I was somewhat depressed by this.
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ReplyDeleteVery nice. This story was creative and interesting. No band words. 5/5 Made sence, there were no problems. <@:)
ReplyDeletei love you word choice it really brings out the story more. But i think you couldadd a little more. It was kinda short and missing something
ReplyDeletegood story, but it is a little short.
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